Personal Statements

When writing your personal statement you should consider the following.

Distinguish yourself

Identify those experiences that have influenced your decision to attend graduate school or have formed you as the person you are today. Identify those characteristics that make you suitable for graduate-level study. One of your goals is to avoid writing a very generic statement that any candidate could have written (e.g., "I am very determined; I work hard; I am a committed student..."). You need to distinguish yourself from other applicants by highlighting those experiences that make you unique.

Be original

This is hard to do, but you need to show an admissions committee that you are more than just a good student. This is the opportunity to talk about personal experiences that have shaped you. It's okay to talk about your family or friends, about a summer job, or about a volunteer experience that really affected you. Make sure you connect your personal experience to the larger themes and ideas of your essay.

Fully develop key points

The hallmarks of good writing include clarity, development, good use of detail and examples, and a sincere voice. Too often students do not provide a full discussion of their experiences.

Avoid writing statements like "My internship at a local mental health ward was also very rewarding." This communicates very little. Identify the hospital, the type of job you were doing, who you reported to, the specifics of a case you worked, the lessons you learned there, and how these experiences are relevant to your graduate school choice.

Analysis

"My work as a peer tutor in the Academic Resource Center allowed me to better understand the various ways students approach writing assignments. I was able to classify students according to the drafts they brought in... I learned that revision techniques need to be tailored to the learning styles of individual students."

Be aware of words/phrases that don't say anything

Avoid the pitfall of over-using words such as significant, important, of great interest, great experience, motivated, and driven. In and of themselves, these words aren't necessarily bad, but they can often become a substitute for specific and focused writing. For example:

"My senior thesis was very significant in my development; it influenced my decision to attend graduate school."

versus

"My senior thesis on the intertextual relationships between Charles Dickens and William Makepeace Thackeray compelled me to discover other great literary relationships."

Target the school

Identify what it is about the school that attracts you. For example, "The English Department at the University of Massachusetts appeals to me because of its strength in the field of literary theory. In particular, Professor Smith's seminal work in semiotics and deconstruction..." This might mean doing a little research as part of the application process.

Revise, revise, and revise

You probably haven't had to ever write anything resembling a personal statement before, so don't expect to get it right the first time. You might need to write a couple drafts before you're ready to begin refining the prose. We strongly recommend that someone-a professor, advisor, or the director of academic advisement-review your personal statement with you.

Explaining low grades/low test scores

If you feel compelled to explain a bad semester/year or a reason why your standardized test scores are low, consider whether the personal statement is the best place to do it. If such an explanation can be smoothly integrated into the body of the essay, fine, if not, you might add an addendum in a different part of the application. Also, be objective and even-minded when explaining these areas. Graduate schools do not want to hear whining. They would prefer a mature and balanced approach.

Explaining your weaknesses

Be careful when graduate schools ask you to do this. Identify weaknesses that have already been able to overcome, or suggest weaknesses on which you can offer a positive slant. Don't reveal something that will sink your application.

Cardinal Sins, or "Never Do This When Writing a Personal Statement"

Never send a personal statement that contains grammatical or spelling errors or a personal statement that misidentifies the school for which you are applying. In an age of computers, students sometimes forget to change the name of the school. For example, you might write, "The English Department at the University of Massachusetts appeals to me because...", when you are actually sending the essay to the University of Connecticut.

Never over-exceed length limits. If the school asks for only two pages, two and a half pages might be okay, but four pages is not. On a similar note, don't change font and margin sizes to cram more material onto a page. Admissions personnel recognize this immediately and it annoys them.

Here are samples of personal statement topics about which Saint Anselm students have written.

• Academic Topics
• Volunteer Experiences
• Field Work in the Major
• Center for Volunteers Work
• Clinical Research Experiences
• Campus Ministry
• Laboratory Experiments
• Spring Break Alternative
• Study Abroad Experiences
• Work in the State House
• Personal Tragedy Work
• Experience/Miscellaneous Extracurricular Activities
• Work on a Political Campaign
• Writing for the School Paper
• Running in the Boston Marathon
• Student Government
• Habitat for Humanity
• Senior Thesis
• A Specific Class
• Internships
• Personal Experiences
• Washington Internships
• Childhood Memories-good and bad
• Historic Preservation
• Failures: academic, athletic, social
• Academic Internships
• Role of their Family
• Work in a Law Office
• Dysfunctional Family
• Athletic Accomplishments
• Clubs and Organizations
• Summer Jobs
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